April 27 - Biography in three lines
peeled child pressed between wax housespulled erect in the fierce cave, hungry teeth gnashingresonant, quasi-deaf, a boat moored to the sky
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effective!!!! esp. L 2 ! pulled erect in the fierce cave L3 has more remove --seems reflective. older.
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Out of the depths. Sounds like salvation. Amazing, all that you have said in three lines.
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Intense! And condensed, with some vivid and frightening images. I'm not sure I understand it all, yet the feeling of the whole is loud and clear. I'm so intrigued by that last image. I keep coming...
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That last image! The boat! That's what I really love here. It's just gorgeous. "Resonant" throws me in the same line with "quasi-deaf", but that may be the point of it. Nice one.
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I don't know exactly what it means, but I love "a boat moored to the sky".
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A child pulled between two families, homes. Moored to nothing. Very succinct and powerful
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Ah, the parents' acrimony! The gnashing mouth. a drawing. art therapy. that boat moored to the sky makes the reader feel as if she's underwater. It's hard to breathe underwater... for me, "pulled...
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Well done, Judy. Great idea that calls for the essential. I especially like the first line with its press and peel and wax, and the boat moored to the sky. thanks
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Peeled child seems so creepy to me. Perhaps because it conjures up a very frightening childhood dream of mine. I can still remember it so vividly. I wonder if this is some kind of archetypal thing. ....
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yes, very creepy to me too. I don't often feel a great need to, but here I'd love to hear a little more about Poem's intent.
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